Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Social networks such as Facebook or Instagram have been created for many years with the goal to connect people together. Since there are million of people using the networks, it is not possible to control all the users and some of them might do something unpleasant that bring a negative result to other people or societies. However, in my opinion, I strongly believe that the networks provide more benefits to the world than the negative effects they created.

With regard to individuals, social networks allow people to communicate and share their memory together in many ways. Firstly, friends or colleagues are able to share group photos together while allowing others to see or comment on. Secondly, a student or an expat who live abroad can share daily life activities to their family and bring them closer.

Furthermore, the networks also benefit society by connecting a group of people who has the same interest together. For example, hobbyist photographers can share their idea and knowledge about photography. A professional group such as a group of software developers helps developing junior developers into more capable engineers. These groups sometimes also hold a meeting to bring their knowledge sharing to another level by face-to-face communication and workshops.

Unfortunately, some people in the networks sometimes use the networks in an unethical way to damage the reputation of other people such as cyber bulling, or revenge porn. The networks sometimes are used to bring a group of people who hate a particular person or organization together and eventually might do something undesirable in real world.

In summary, social networks connect people together in various types of relationships such as family, friends, colleagues, local community, profession, love, or hate. Although, people in the networks do many things that benefit themselves or their society, there is also a dark side of the networks that people use it in an unpleasant way.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...onnect people together. Since there are million of people using the networks, it is not...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
...as a group of software developers helps developing junior developers into more capable eng...
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Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unethical way" with adverb for "unethical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...the networks sometimes use the networks in an unethical way to damage the reputation of other peopl...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are sometimes
... bulling, or revenge porn. The networks sometimes are used to bring a group of people who hat...
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Line 9, column 319, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unpleasant way" with adverb for "unpleasant"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...side of the networks that people use it in an unpleasant way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in summary, such as, in my opinion, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30891719745 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86762351704 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544585987261 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8697890753 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.071428571 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226653767956 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848902368454 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731998493372 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141465256169 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826970774236 0.056905535591 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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