Many people complain about commercial advertisements and their influence on children. Should it be controlled by the government? What are the possible effects on children?
Public is blaming commercials about the impact they give to the younger generation. This essay will totally agree with the statement and authorities should take a control over it as advertisements can share bad behaviour patterns.
Nowadays youngsters are sticked behind television to watch serials and movies but different commercials have been added between them. These can be related to alcohol or smoking and might effect kids thinking mentally. The way younger ones brain is working is significantly different from adults. Their creativity and sense of world updates all the time and by seeing those advertisements they could end up smoking or consuming alcohol in early age. For example, i travelled in South-East Asia and saw small kids watching television all day long including the commercials about tobacco and spirits. In streets were very young children smoking which was really sad sight.
To tackle this problem, government must take action and ban advertisements that can impact kids in a bad way. This would reduce the negative influence and also decrease parents consuming these addictive subjects. Instead of showing unfavourable ads government should encourage more family and outdoor activities. We tend to spend too much time watching television and sitting day by day inside. For example, in Estonia we have now commercials about sports to prompt people spend quality time with siblings and keep themselves active, this will stimulate the younger generation also think differently.
In conclusion, advertisements can include very bad impact for little children and can result in bad habits as starting smoking or drinking alcohol in an early age. Government should have a control over ads and may instead show commercials about outdoor activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53818181818 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96200512832 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610909090909 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.6754741855 49.4020404114 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.153846154 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219069877145 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702515887637 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452087151799 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133872823983 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292805195263 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.