In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available fro building them is in the country side. Some people believe that it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.What is your opinion about this?

Essay topics:

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available fro building them is in the country side. Some people believe that it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Due to increase in housing demand, governments are looking towards to expand the buildings in countryside since most of the city do not left enough space to accommodate the demand. Personally, I do not agree with the housing expansion plan in the countryside. This essay will explain why this plan is a bad idea.

Firstly, the exploration and expansion of buildings can harm the environment as the expansion activities involved cutting and burning of the existing trees and plants. The environmental pollutions from such activities can also risk the sustainability of the city. A good example is that the<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> draught crisis</span> threatens <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">some cities in China</span> every year of typhoon season because of the expanding of city by removing the trees along the river bank.

Secondly, the expansion can harm the animal ecosystem which is important for a balanced society. The<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> housing development plan</span> destroyed t<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">he food and living space of the animals, particularly forests</span> and as the result, many of the animals are dead. For instance, the expansion plan of Bago City<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">t</span> <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">killed</span> t<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">he wildlife from </span>Bago<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> </span>Yoma<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> forest </span><span style="font-size: 19.36px;">every year due to</span> and the forest itself is almost extinct.

To conclude, authorities should find other housing solution because the expansion of new buildings in the countryside can disturb and damage the ecosystem of not only the animals but also the environment. Finally, if governments force to implement the plan, people living in these new locations will suffer the environmental problems at the later stage

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 236, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'implementing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: implementing
...ironment. Finally, if governments force to implement the plan, people living in these new lo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.62781954887 5.12529762239 129% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.0228785746 2.80592935109 179% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56015037594 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 109.778138395 49.4020404114 222% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.272727273 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1818181818 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27272727273 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0509720881625 0.244688304435 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397048550149 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394363116363 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0638008071851 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507137566222 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.9 13.0946893788 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 21.47 12.4159519038 173% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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