Many young people today their own mobile phone and believe it is essential to their lives. Other people dislike mobile phones and think that they are both a nuisance and an unnecessary luxury item. To what extend do you agree or disagree with two points of view?
In contemporary world, it is not denied technological developments have revolutionized to our life so technological devices are considered as the essential facilitator part of life. In this point opinions are divided whether mobile phones are essential or unnecessary luxury item for young people or not. I honestly think that mobile phones are really necessary tool in our life regardless of age group classification such as teens, adults.
Thanks to mobile phone, in case of emergency, young people can easily reach their families or friends to ask helping them. For example, young people are the target group for thieves because thieves think that young people are more likely defenseless than adults. While walking, they can face the dangers such as snatching, theft. In this situation, if they have their own mobile phone, they can easily call policemen and tell about this situation to their families. In addition, using mobile phone makes distances between relatives and friends disappear and users more flexibility. To be more specific, when they are on move, they can reach their friends and relatives who are living at another country at any time. On the other hand, the most fruitful advantage of using mobile phone is to ease our daily routines. Young people who can have a mobile phone with the access of the Internet can easily reserve an appointment for doctor’s control, pay their bills or their tuition fee by using bank’s mobile application or buy a ticket on online.
Despite aforementioned advantages, some people think that young people do not need to use phones because young people at school on weekdays can contact their family by using school management’s phone in case of emergency. At the same time, if they have their own mobile phone, they can needlessly their time by playing games and searching on the Internet or chatting their friends on WhatsApp, Messenger. Spending more time with phones damage their eyes and causes posture problem.
In conclusion, although having own mobile phone may seem unnecessary, today
the use of technological devices has become a necessity regardless of age. If we teach the
if we can teach the importance of using the phone when necessary, we will avoid the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
honestly, if, may, really, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18306010929 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82582355221 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513661202186 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9075157246 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5625 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40412850102 0.244688304435 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143855431378 0.084324248473 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852310801447 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180213122978 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124643118363 0.056905535591 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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