In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more timewith their friends.Why has this change occurred?Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

Essay topics:

In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time
with their friends.
Why has this change occurred?
Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

It is argued that in this contemporary era, adolescents like to have more time with their companions and less with the kin. This essay will argue that this transformation is due to a generation gap, while I believe that the guardians should not restrict their children to have more time at home, instead they should change their attitude towards them.

These days the understanding gap between parents and children has been widened. This is to say that most of the children think that the believes and thoughts they have do not match with their parents, and they are unable to understand what are their areas of interest so that they do not like to share ideas with their parents. Thus, they are more comfortable with their age fellows and spend more time more part of the day with them due to the sharing of the same idea. For example, a recent survey conducted on teen psychology in the United Kingdom reveals that 85% of teenagers prefer the company of their friend due to the same interests.

One the other hand, enforcing children to spend more time with their family is not beneficial because this would lead them to think that their independence is occupied. However, the behaviour of the elders in the family needs to be changed because when pubescent have a more favourable and comfortable environment at home they would be willing to spend more time at home and pour their heart out with their siblings and parents rather than with their friends. For instance, a recent study conducted by the government stated that the parents who were more friendly, their children spent the least time with their friends and parents were their role models.

To conclude, nowadays the adolescents feel more comfortable in their friend’s company due to the disagreement of ideas and believes with their family. However, I believe that without forcing them healthy time spent with teenagers by changing their behaviour would be more beneficial.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
...hat most of the children think that the believes and thoughts they have do not match wit...
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Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...hat the believes and thoughts they have do not match with their parents, and they ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, thus, while, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95744680851 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5267482871 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471124620061 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8670462467 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.272727273 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9090909091 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.54476793152 0.244688304435 223% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.246744237635 0.084324248473 293% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108182988074 0.0667982634062 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372748343697 0.151304729494 246% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0930934896036 0.056905535591 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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