Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?
Most top-level posts in organizations are filled by males despite the fact that the workforces in many First World countries are predominantly composed of females; thus, it must be made compulsory for organizations to reserve a fixed percentage of these positions for females. I do not agree with the idea of reserving a fixed number of posts for women because women will not be incentivized to work hard, since they will know that they can easily take on executive roles without working hard for those roles, and secondly, talented men will be prevented from occupying top positions since those positions will be occupied by women on account of women’s fixed quota.
It must not be made compulsory for business enterprises to allocate a fixed number of posts for women because doing so will discourage women from working hard. Female workers in lower positions will harbor a feeling that no matter how poor they perform; they will still take on executive roles. Consequently, they will not work hard, and not only will the performance of female employees decline, but the performance of the entire company will also suffer. For instance, according to an article published in the New York Times, once Boogy Woogie, a Chinese shoe manufacturer, announced that 30% of managerial roles were reserved for females, female staff members lost the desire to work overtime because they knew that they would be promoted to the position of a manager without working extra hours.
My other reason for disagreeing with the idea of reserving a fixed quota for female employees is that this measure will prevent gifted men from occupying top posts. As those positions will be filled by women, male workers will not be able to rise through the ranks within their organizations. As a result, skilled, knowledgeable and learned men will feel that they have been treated unfairly and will consider resigning from their jobs. For example, according to an article published in Time magazine, once Scooby-Doo, a Finish chocolate manufacturer, passed a law that a certain number of vacancies were allotted to female employees, more and more talented male members of staff started tendering their resignation because they realized that they could not be promoted to more responsible roles within the organization.
In conclusion, I am in complete disagreement with the statement that a fixed percentage of posts must be allotted to female staff because such a measure will demotivate women from working hard, and secondly, talented men will not be able to fill high-level vacancies.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 418.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16507177033 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79450927136 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480861244019 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.2975951904 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.0177377882 49.4020404114 200% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 196.272727273 106.682146367 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0 20.7667163134 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2727272727 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165639197673 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767515642937 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514689599167 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121331757971 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419116775294 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.9 13.0946893788 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 11.3001002004 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 9.78957915832 291% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.1190380762 170% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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