Multicultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
Diversity in cultures and society is according to me very essential for healthy and happy relationships in any civilization. People living in societies with huge varieties of culture, traditions and languages attain certain qualities which may not be seen in monocultural ones.
There are more positive aspects than negatives of a society where one can fing people of different ethnic groups living together. Firstly, people living in diverse environment tend to have the quality of tolerance towards fellow friends. Moreover, it is very easy for people living in multicultural societies to accept someone who is entirely from different ethnic group. For instance, India has been known to be the most diverse country of all and it can be clearly seen through history it has welcomed all types of people with open arms , be it Mughals or Britishers and some of their traditions are still prevailing here.
Moving further, countries with various ethnic groups have the priviledge to enjoy different festivals of each other which bring them together to celebrate. Consequently, unity is reinforced at these occasions even if any bitterness existed before. People also enjoy different dressing attires in a multicultural society which again act as binding force amoung masses. Also, people in such communities can enjoy different art forms and skills particular to one community. Food is another thing which people can have variety to choose from in a society with multiple ethnic groups. To substantiate, there is wide variety of food available in any restuarant you visit in india, which are entirely from different part of a country.
In conclusion, I would like to reaffirm my stand in favour of multicultural societies and benefits they offer over single ethnic group.Undoubtedly, there will be some conflict, however, it is a part every society, multi or mono cultural.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, another thing, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29530201342 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92159946743 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597315436242 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3326388259 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.384615385 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148381888944 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598267440702 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424786316666 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835090551363 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412371416302 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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