Music should not be taught in schools. Instead, other subjects such as computers and science should be taught. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that art lesson, especially music, is not allowed to put in curriculum and some people think information technology and science more important to be learnt. Most of the people believe that some subject, such as artificial intelligence could help school learners to have better career in the future. In my opinion, music is crucial in future as well as computers and science.
Admittedly, science and technology are subjects that student would have learnt individually and would impact on every aspect of the live. Therefore, people think they are principals of learning, although it is possible to become proficient in solitary. To give an instance, child at age of 4 or 5 could learn computers by imitating their parents’ pattern of use at first without no logic. After a while the child whom just simulate their parents, could think and create something new. The most well-known example was the boy at age of 6 that has written android program in gaming and it surprisingly gains a remarkable market share.

In the other hand, music is and generally art makes student more creative and gives them the inspiration for their future life. Musicians who had trained at early ages, would get higher degree of education and more successful. Music not only influence on physical health but also effects on the mental and spiritual part of body. Additionally, learning music at school, gives student the opportunity of being familiar with their innate talents.

To put in nutshell, There is no priority for science and computer over against music and art and as result music and practical science such as computer are equally predominant in didactic. Provided to both should have taken as an arbitrary course in curriculum.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08013937282 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73356883882 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609756097561 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3901597554 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.142857143 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167073390327 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520035035677 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473593830015 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107558753534 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540089195903 0.056905535591 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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