Not many young people in countries around the world go to and enjoy concerts and plays. Why is this the case? Should they be encouraged to attend?
It is claimed that a vast decline has been seen in the number of people going to attend live music and theater performances these days. This essay agrees that cut-throat competition in education and excess use of technology are the two biggest culprits of this issue and demonstrate that limiting access to the internet and encourage them at schools are viable solutions.
To commence with, burgeoning competitiveness among students is the prominent cause behind this phenomenon. That is to say, a majority of pupils are running in a race, in which they have to surpass their opponents to get the first position in class, thus they have a huge burden on their minds, which forces them to remain glued to their books and have no spare duration to spend on extracurricular activities or entertainment. Apart from this, technology is another aspect that catches most of the energy. In other words, a diverse means of entertainment is being provided by electronic gadgets to the youngster, which ultimately reduces the need of visiting such places. A recent survey
conducted in the high school in my area has revealed that about 45% of teenagers spend their spare time at home accessing social networking sites and hardly go out from the four walls of their house.
In regard to the solutions, the onus rests on the shoulders of parents. As young ones access the internet at home during their free time, the birth giver should keep an eagle eye on their activities and monitor their use of computers and cell phones, so that the growing buds choose alternative sources of spending hours effectively. Moreover, management authorities are also responsible for developing the interest of students in the activities related to music and movies. They should organize small concert-like functions at learning institutes to motivate them to attend the live music shows.
On balance, fewer people are willing to attend outdoor entertainment shows. This essay states that contesting and the advent of new techniques are the two factors, which can be curbed by adopting some
measure by guardians and school authorities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, moreover, so, thus, apart from, in other words, in regard to, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12427745665 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80425619103 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598265895954 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.2598986289 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.384615385 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6153846154 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154003411808 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511740200808 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383987003378 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681676419275 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448623239789 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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