Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To What extent do you agree or disagree?
Film stars are well-known, these days, for their fame and property but not for what they have achieved, creating a negative impact on the young generation. If asked, I do not completely agree with this notion. This essay will narrate my arguments and the other side of this view, followed by a reasoned conclusion.
To begin with, the main arguments for such trend is attracting the youth toward offensive activities. Since these stars stimulate children to spent money, they follow short cuts to earn money either by kidnapping or murder. For example, police is usually seen arresting old children involving in chain snatching to purchase a bike. In addition, it also resist them to become socialize. While adolescents are busy with them self and are absolutely engrossed to imitate the starts for their look on small or big screen, they lose contact not only with friend but also with their parents.
Conversely, they the young humans get more focused. As these individuals do not care of anybody and dream of their famous celebrity, they are encouraged to mold themselves as an affluent person in their future life. For instance, during fancy dress competition in many schools, most of the students are imitating the film actors and taking oath to become as wealthy as they are. However, it is obvious that majority of those learners are not able to hit the target and lack behind in their life while following their favorite person on screen.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that although the famous people on screen might prove a boon to few children, mostly it is found that they have been involved in crimes or brake their relations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, however, if, look, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98201438849 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51325609271 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636690647482 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1318970376 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.538461538 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227464020244 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760707740479 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508388180248 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136994256598 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592044554458 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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