Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned. Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to join instead. Please say– Where and when do you plan to go?– Why can’t your brother come?– Give a short description of the trip.

Essay topics:

Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned. Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to join instead. Please say

– Where and when do you plan to go?

– Why can’t your brother come?

– Give a short description of the trip.

Dear Jay,

I’m writing this letter to invite you to join me for a tour because my brother has refused to accompany me.

Actually we both siblings were planning to commute to Mumbai in order to explore famous beaches of Marine lines and the huge shopping market at Mumbai Central.Even our journey is on Sunday of coming week after 5 days as we both did not have any particular schedule.

However,my brother had a call from my father,asking him to accompany Delhi on account of certain emergency in business.Moreover, my brother had a project ,pending since long ,to complete for his graduation at New delhi. Hence he has no chance to join me.

What is more, we are,firstly, moving to Mumbai from our hometown Baroda in the train tomorrow night.Secondly,after reaching there, we’ve to travel everywhere in a hired car,which is already booked.Will return back to our home within 3 days by flight from Andheri to Vadodara.

I am looking forward to joining me without any hesitation.

Lots of love,

Praveen Solanki

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ve any particular schedule. However,my brother had a call from my father,aski...
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...icular schedule. However,my brother had a call from my father,asking him to ...
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...ccount of certain emergency in business.Moreover, my brother had a project ,pending sinc...
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... in a hired car,which is already booked.Will return back to our home within 3 days ...
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...which is already booked.Will return back to our home within 3 days by flight from...
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... me without any hesitation. Lots of love, Praveen Solanki
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... Lots of love, Praveen Solanki
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, hence, however, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 887.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15697674419 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08420231958 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.720930232558 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.124292081 44.8134815571 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 126.714285714 76.5299724578 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 16.8248392259 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1428571429 4.34317383033 303% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 2.54639175258 785% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113881335661 0.216113520407 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485391350315 0.0766984524023 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541459430811 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0655586095271 0.12726935374 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627786850261 0.0580467560999 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 8.37731958763 181% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 70.7449484536 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 7.45979381443 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 8.71597938144 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 8.62886597938 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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