Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned. Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to join instead. Please say– Where and when do you plan to go?– Why can’t your brother come?– Give a short description of the trip.

Essay topics:

Your brother cannot come on a trip that you planned. Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to join instead. Please say

– Where and when do you plan to go?

– Why can’t your brother come?

– Give a short description of the trip.

Dear James,

Hopes this letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing this letter to invite you to go with me on a short trip to the France. Let me elaborate in detail.

Elucidating in detail, As earlier my brother had to go on trip with me. Unfortunately, he got selected for an interview for a job he had applied couple of months ago. Besides, he was also not aware of this job opportunity as he has just applied it casually through online posting. So, I have made sudden decision to bother you to come with me on this exquisite journey departing on 21st October and we will arrive back on 1st December.

Additionally, I have already booked two flight tickets for me and my brother, which I will change it on your name after talking with air customer service. Precisely, We travel via West jet airways they proficient in their services. Moreover, I have booked hotel Paradise which gives the view of Eiffel tower. Furthermore, we will buy the day passes and fast service cards to escape the queue. Simultaneously, the breakfast is in the hotel menu but we need to do lunch and dinner to the cuisines in the vacinity of paris. Also, we will lease a car to commute to visit the London too. Hence, we will have a full entertainment over there during our short journey with spectacular views of ancient buildings and monuments, museums and breathtaking views of London bridges and auditorium. Finally, the expenses to be by us partially and I will also send itinerary details attached with the letter.

Waiting for you and the upcoming days to have fun and thrill in the Paris. Save the date 21st October.

Best regards,

Summit.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nately, he got selected for an interview for a job he had applied couple of month...
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... their services. Moreover, I have booked hotel Paradise which gives the view of E...
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...y and I will also send itinerary details attached with the letter. Waiting f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 26.3917525773 167% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 937.175257732 148% => OK
No of words: 295.0 206.0 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70169491525 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 3.78020617076 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62928068498 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 127.690721649 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610169491525 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 290.88556701 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2710628968 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0555555556 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3888888889 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13786661966 0.216113520407 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040484010984 0.0766984524023 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611596455567 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894442230673 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553960695349 0.0580467560999 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 41.2886597938 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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