Nowadays celebrities are more known for their glamour and wealth than for their achievement, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
These days famous people are often known for their glamour and abundance of money they have instead of their attainments. Some people believe that celebrities’ lifestyles can be bad models to teenagers. I partially agree with this view. I believe that this is not always true and young people should be responsible for their own behaviour.
To begin with, media sometimes give more attention to the personal lives of well known people such as politicians and film stars in order to attract the young viewers. Majority of the teenagers are not mature enough to choose what is right and wrong. They tend to just blindly follow what they see on the television or imitate their heroes. In this way, celebrities who are supposed to be the role models of the society mislead their young fans.
On the other hand, many teenagers live without being negatively influenced by the famous people. They only admire the professional side and the positive aspects of their traits. These people do not consider the celebrities’ glamour and wealth even though they are aware of these.For that reason, this group of youngsters does not want to completely copy the celebrity life. I believe that they might be trained in that way from their childhood to filter out the right things from others. Apart from that, famous personalities are just human beings. They can be attracted to wealth and glamour world. We cannot blame them for these shortcomings. It is the responsibility of young people to choose the good and discard the bad.
To conclude, it is possible that young people set celebrities as their role models. It does not mean that they need to copy everything from them. I believe that youngsters should be able to adopt only the positive traits of their stars.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well, apart from, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94295302013 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65725412871 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540268456376 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.995702583 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5263157895 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6842105263 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295893106038 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887994050232 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620034860665 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191302589738 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483384137013 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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