Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centres provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinio

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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centres provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Currently, many parents tend to be busy working, and they need to rely on someone else to take care of their offspring. while some people believe that childcare is best option for their children to be looked after, rather than grandparent. well, Personally I would argue that it is better for children to be looked after by their grandparents.

On the one hand, it is believed that youngsters should be sent to childcare for some reasons. The first one is that since those centres are professional organizations and their staff is often well-trained. For examples, if child falls over and get himself injured, a staff can react quickly and give him first aid. Along with that they have good babysitting skills. Furthermore, children have a chance to make a friends with his peer while coming there and can get more confidence and learn the language skill.

On the other hand, I believe it is better idea for grandchildren to be looked after by their grandparents. Firstly, as grandparents have lived for many years and have brought up their own offspring, they have much experience in raising children. For instance, they might know how to calm the baby when he cries. Secondly, grandparents are family members, so they love their grandchildren more than other people do. As a result, they tend to spend more time and effort caring for their grandchildren compared to childcare staff member. Finally, youngsters looked after by their grandparents are likely to become more family oriented and appreciate the value of happy family.

In conclusion, while there are some benefits of children being sent to childcare centres, I believe they should be looked after by their grandparents

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: While
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06071428571 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78836641152 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532142857143 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.4863906354 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.4666666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264916733484 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913202107787 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506862671985 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162902870672 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395385042853 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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