Nowadays an ordinary person can become popular through the Internet and TV media. Is it a positive or a negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples.
With the invention of the Internet and development of TV media more and more of ordinary people become famous. Some people see this trend as a beneficial one whereas other argue that it causes a harm to the society. In my opinion, it’s rather a negative development. This essay will discuss both sides of the tendency.
Some believe that the Internet and TV shows provide an unique opportunity for anyone to gain money from something they enjoy to do. For example, talented singers may participate in musical TV shows, such as Voice. As a result , they become popular and recognizable , therefore they can give concerts for their new admirers and release music albums which their fans would purchase. Another example is various channels on Youtube where people create short videos on different subjects such as comedy, travel , history , etc. If a channel obtain many subscribers and views of the videos the owner may receive substantial amounts of money from sponsors and advertisement.
However, a fast popularity on internet or TV media may convey a false message to the people especially the young ones that it is possible to financially secure themselves without a sufficient effort. Some youngsters spend tremendous amount of time taking photos and making videos in hope to gain popularity on Instagram or Youtube. In fact, only a small percent of people actually attains the success due to enormous competition in the entertainment industry. This time could be instead devoted to the developing the more practical skills which would be suitable for a future career. In other words, an illusion of easy and definite success on internet and TV media distracts people from pursuing more realistic career related goals.
To conclude, I acknowledge the benefits and opportunities that Internet and TV media provides to the people. However, I’m concerned that a lot of time may be wasted in chasing popularity in highly competitive field. Consequently it may have a detrimental effect on people’s professional lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, for example, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22018348624 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87091417665 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60244648318 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8432572601 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.411764706 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202386095439 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597577921112 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638061607377 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118880101756 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304244057785 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.