Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people claim that high expenses on big celebrations such as weddings and birthdays are not worth it whereas others believe it’s indispensable for people and communities. From my point of view, money should be spend on more important purposes than parties.
Proponents of spending large amounts of money on celebrations argue that merits for people and society outweighs the drawbacks of a financial burden. It’s true that some occasions happen just once in a lifetime and spending time with a family and friends is priceless. To celebrate a birthday in an expensive restaurant around close people will leave many heartwarming memories for all. Moreover, local communities benefit from such festivities as many people are employed in entertainment businesses. For example, about 65% of an income of restaurants is proved to be from holding private services for different events.
However, some people believe that costly celebrations doesn’t worth the money spent on them . In fact, majority of people have multiple financial obligations such as mortgages and loans on top of every day expenses on food, clothes, gasoline, etc. Instead of wasting hardly earned savings on some event , the money could be spent on more practical purposes such as household appliances, education or even a new car which would be a great investment for the future and can be used for a long time. For instance, some young people spend tremendous amount of money on the wedding and later struggle to pay the first installment of mortgage for their first property.
To conclude, I acknowledge that it’s imperative to celebrate some important events of our lives as it brings people together and can be remembered for a long time. That said, I am of the opinion that the vast amount of budget should be spent on more essential goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, whereas, for example, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1677852349 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85341121389 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580536912752 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1124164743 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.461538462 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253410376372 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954353574024 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510438480433 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165505935783 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517958651689 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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