Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Organizing parties and ceremonies has been a prominent feature in this age.while some people believe that these occasions are wasteful and do not worth what they cost, other confirm its benefits for the individuals and the societies. In my opinion,I agree with the latter point of view.
It undeniable that many people are exaggerating in their celebrations.on the family level, parents are burdened with these types of parties because they should tighten their budget to put aside some money for such parties.Similarly, companies and governments assign massive funds for ceremonies and national celebrations which may exceed the benefits that are held for. For example, a company may celebrate launching a campaign for fighting a disease in a party which may costs the same budget that assigned for ending the disease itself .moreover, parties may not suit introverts because they become uncomfortable and nervous when they deal with a crowd of people so other means such as sending gifts or thanking letters may be preferable for them and deliver the same message.

On contrast, the advantages of throwing parties are seen from other wide perspectives. For the families, parents make parties in order to encourage and motivate their children which deepens and strengths their familial bonds.Companies hold celebrations when they initiate a new project to break the ice and stimulate the productive communication between the members of the project. For the communities, national celebrations enhance the sense of patriotism and inclusiveness between the citizens which leads to more strong, coherent and healthy community. Thus,there are many positive impacts for celebrations on the families and their
societies.
In conclusion, although some private and national parties are exorbitant, I believe that benefits from such occasions are numerous and could be attainable without wastefulness.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, similarly, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55172413793 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03452194332 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572413793103 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.653924835 49.4020404114 242% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 178.888888889 106.682146367 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2222222222 20.7667163134 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7777777778 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202547955093 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850912579744 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401836704534 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120068927901 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518694491555 0.056905535591 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 13.0946893788 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.78957915832 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 10.7795591182 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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