Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The role of personality and images are play vital role in our life. it is irrefutable that, some sports personality admire us just because of strong character, sense of humor, way of thinking, strong decision making and looks and most important their sport style. However, on the other hand, few things are not acceptable or tolerance in the form of smoking, drugs habits etc.
I put my positive and negative views regarding my paragraph,

At begin with, sports are the versatile game, it is one of the most famous game among the people and many people has desire they can become a national hero in all over the world and people love them. However, it is quite difficult situation because every one cannot fulfill his demand that's why they make the images and admire people who are related to sports field. Moreover, I strongly put my positive views in to two segments.

Firstly, I have seen many example in my society, most of the proverbial personality are introvert. they play active role in social service, they love to do help others with in a country or outside the country, they help those people who are needy and they required food and shutter. I think it is a basic reason that's why people love to follow them. Here i would like to talk about Imran Khan, he is one of the most well known Pakistani cricketer in all over the world, when he joined cricket he won the world cup, after that he established shaukat khannum hospital for those people who are fighting with cancer diseases.

Secondly, youth are admire sports stars just because of their look, fitness, personality and none other than their popularity.

On the other hand, why we should not admire to sports people or well known personality? It is commonly believe that, in our society there are plethora amount of immense issue in the form of drugs, wine, smoking and so on. When sports people are famous they are involved in to bad habits and start to do many negative things and according to this kind of behavior young generation can easily follow it. That's why it is not good for health and it creates negativity.

I put in it nutshell, I pen down saying that, I believe that, the positive ratio of young people admiration is outweighed rather than negative development.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, i think, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72658227848 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40352515772 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516455696203 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.3814528364 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.6875 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6875 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241235564545 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731684800258 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633058500881 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113474193274 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481048089475 0.056905535591 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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