People should be encouraged to do leisure activities such as mountain climbing or sailing alone round the world even though these activities may be dangerous because this will help to develop their courage and confidence To what extent do you agree or dis

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People should be encouraged to do leisure activities such as mountain climbing or sailing alone round the world, even though these activities may be dangerous, because this will help to develop their courage and confidence.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Today, leisure activities play important rules in people’s life. Not only such activities cause mental and physical health, but also they give people the opportunity to optimize their characters such as their self-esteem. Although a flock of people holds that homo sapiens had better accept hazards of activities and do them individually, I disagree with this view and I will explain why.
Firstly, When it comes to courage and confidence, most of the time, these two characters are at odds with taking a risk. This is a fact that when people can withstand harsh condition and achieve success, they will have a sense of pride. Doing such activities individually gives them the opportunity to gain a clear understanding of their skills and precious experiences, which are efficient for the rest of their life. However, in most cases, if people are not knowledgable enough, this action can leads to failure with the irreparable drawbacks such as death or physical disabilities. So, it is ell worth the effort to emphasize on safer ways.
Secondly, People have an inherent tendency to achieve new experiences and progress. As a result, they do their best to take part in various sports by a person or as a team member. However, considering their abilities to take an essential rule in their success. Doing activities without any background does not help them in strengthen their confidence always. For instance, a person who has not a good sense of negotiation cannot sail alone, but he may become successful working as team members because they can support each other and cover their weak points.
In conclusion, despite the fact the gain of success in doing activities individually is measurable, choosing the safer ways to develop their confidence is more crucial.

Votes
Average: 5.7 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 499, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...ot knowledgable enough, this action can leads to failure with the irreparable drawbac...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...elp them in strengthen their confidence always. For instance, a person who has not a g...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09965635739 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86793179313 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594501718213 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7264360489 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26562448256 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876108739668 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468799537058 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163635169917 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340811967113 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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