A person’s health is their own responsibility rather than the government’s responsibility.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It has been argued for quite a long time that whether people should be supported by the government authorities for their health related issues. However, many of us believe that we are responsible for any kind of diseases ourselves. In my opinion, the government should be responsible for any kind of illness and help them to fight against different spreadable diseases. In this essay, I will discuss further on how the government should support people on fighting against critical infections by using their money from taxes and raising awareness among people to decrease human body viruses.
To begin with, in every nation, people pay taxes for public services such as medical, education and better transportation. So, authorities should utilize this tax money paid by general public properly by providing good medical services, which could be helpful in taking care of health related issues. Moreover, if they build a group of medical fitness teams, who would be responsible taking care of critical health problem, then it would be easier for the them to tackle the health issues. In past, there were lower number of options to tackle the health related problems, but now there are many possibilities to challenge any serious health problem. To illustrate, the govern bodies should spend more on well-being of people and secure public health by introducing advanced health policies.
Another point which could be made while dealing with sickness is that the govern bodies should raise awareness among people by creating some kind of advertisements against critical illness such as obesity, tuberculosis and diabetes. Advertising on problematic human body issues could lead to decrease the number of well-being related issues, however, some people think that advertisements are only for marketing purpose. Many social media websites such as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram, for instance, can play an important role in decreasing human safety related critical problems by broadcasting advertisements, it could be helpful for people on taking preventing actions to avoid unhealthiness.
To sum up, the medical department should be responsible for fitness and health issues, they should use money appropriately by investing in medical services. Nevertheless, some kind of awareness campaigns could be raised by authorities to decrease down such issues.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...s should utilize this tax money paid by general public properly by providing good medical serv...
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Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'them'?
Suggestion: the; them
...th problem, then it would be easier for the them to tackle the health issues. In past, t...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'In the past'?
Suggestion: In the past
...r the them to tackle the health issues. In past, there were lower number of options to ...
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Line 3, column 667, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... serious health problem. To illustrate, the govern bodies should spend more on well-being ...
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Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ade while dealing with sickness is that the govern bodies should raise awareness among peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, well, while, for instance, kind of, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46849315068 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85612463426 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523287671233 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.622297901 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.571428571 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0714285714 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0902328402376 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414518807744 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258605948433 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0621456989745 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035685361755 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.