the plans below show the layout of a university s sports center now and how it will look after redevelopment

Essay topics:

the plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The diagram depicts the structure of a university’s sports center at the present and its transformation after reconstruction.
Looking from an overall perspective, there are significant changes that provide more amenities with sports facilities toward the West and the East of the Sports Centre. At the main entrance, there will add more changing rooms, and entertainment spots like shopping and café.

At the present, there are two outdoor courts on either side of the university sports building. The plan is to convert the west outdoor courts into a leisure pool larger in size than the current 25m pool at the center. To the east outdoor courts are going to replace with a sports hall next to the seating area, erect two adjacent dance studios at the northeast. The facilities in the main building will not undergo alterations including changing rooms, reception, pool, and seating. The only slight difference is that the northernmost gym above the swimming pool will be double in size eastwards.

Right on the entrance, two changing rooms will be constructed at the end of two sides of the south of the building and the adjoining sports shop to the west. Across from the sports shop, there will be a café for relaxing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 226, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nce, there will add more changing rooms, and entertainment spots like shopping an...
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Line 4, column 163, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: larger
...west outdoor courts into a leisure pool larger in size than the current 25m pool at the center...
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Line 4, column 274, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...door courts are going to replace with a sports hall next to the seating area, erect tw...
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Line 4, column 572, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: double
...ost gym above the swimming pool will be double in size eastwards. Right on the entrance, tw...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 24.0651302605 12% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1029.0 1615.20841683 64% => OK
No of words: 205.0 315.596192385 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01951219512 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76019121841 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 176.041082164 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546341463415 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 506.74238477 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7445647036 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.9 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.2 7.06120827912 17% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184420438039 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792976458228 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045853077453 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126215993332 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384250044433 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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