Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among under age of 18 Some psychologist claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers To what extent | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among under age of 18. Some psychologist claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

Statistics from the recent studies show that heinous crime is increasingly popular among the minors. Psychologists identify the failure of parents and teachers to provide the children with the necessary social and psychological skills are the main factors responsible for the recent unfortunate development. I completely agree with the opinion because today's parents spend less time with their children and schools give little attention to teaching of moral values.

The parents play an important role in child's personality development. It is quite unfortunate that most parents hardly have sufficient time to spend with children. They have more time at work and become so much attached to their job to the point that abandoned their responsibilities as parents. For instance, from the interrogation of the juvenile delinquents , larger percentage claimed lack of parents led them to crime.

Furthermore, a growing number of research suggest that school is the most important agent of socialisation after family. It is also a place where moral values can be learnt . However, these days, the education that young people receive is imbalanced as teachers completely focus on academics at the expense of teaching of moral values. For instance , an essential subject such as Civic Education that was known for educating young students about moral values and disciplines has been expunged from the school curriculum.

In conclusion, it is undoubtedly true that incapability of the parents and teachers to teach the teenagers essential social and emotional skills are mainly responsible for the meteoric rise in the criminal activities among the youths.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52362204724 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97715974438 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59842519685 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.740652147 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.916666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22630117791 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786580317931 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630494845579 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133432845097 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505629680497 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments