Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.Why is this?Is it positive/negative development?Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?------------------------------------------------

It is true that shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. In my view, rapidly changing fashion and advertisments are mainly responsible for this.

Firstly, as the trends are changing, so to be updated the younger generation always try to buy something which is trending. As, the affordability of things has been increased so, now everyone can buy things at an affordable price. The presence of online platforms has made it much easier for the people to buy the trending things at an affordable price with a single click on mouse. Also, the younger generation is easily influenced by the advertisement due toh which they buy things impulsively. Some of the young adults usually buy more products just for showoff or to gain the attention of their Friends. All these reasons are responsible for the popularity of shopping among the young adults.

In my opinion, this leisure activity is contributing more towards the negative development of young adults. Younger adults can use their leisure time in some healthy activities rather than wasting their time on shopping. This leisure activity is leading to sedentary lifestyle of more people from younger generation.

To sum up, young adults can use their leisure time in some other activities which can help them in their skill development.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... toh which they buy things impulsively. Some of the young adults usually buy more products ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, in my opinion, in my view, it is true, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1133.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 223.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08071748879 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75114209062 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569506726457 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 16.6633329999 49.4020404114 34% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.4166666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5833333333 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269241091196 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114815800763 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140009888886 0.0667982634062 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187762702542 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135170190243 0.056905535591 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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