Shopping is seen as one of the most favourite ways to spend spare time for young people. Why do you think it is happening? Should they be encouraged to spend less time on that?
Nowadays, youth tend to spend their leisure time doing shopping. This is because modern people live in the era of consumerism and juveniles are constantly bombarded by ads and promos with an appeal to purchase a new product. In my opinion, it is way better for adolescents to find other activities for their free time and society has to motivate them to do it.
The main reason why the younger generation prefers to spend their time shopping is that mass media spread ideas of constant consumption. For instance, today a person cannot consider themselves as successful without brand new clothes or mobile phones. Thus, the immature minds of youngsters fall easily under the influence of advertisements and as a result, shopping has become one of the top activities that the youth do during their free time. Another factor, which contributes to making the experience of shopping so much attractive is modern shopping centers provide plenty of opportunities for enjoyment and relaxation. There are different cafes, restaurants, cinemas, and even some amusement arcades for children in it.
Parents and society as a whole should be concerned about how much time teenagers are spending on shopping. This is because as a rule, this kind of leisure time is a wastage of time and resources/ not to mention that up growing population may develop a dangerous habit of buying unnecessary products and become shopaholics.
Consequently, the youth should be drawn to other activities such as sport and art. This way a new generation would grow up strong, healthy, and creative and would be able to contribute to the development of a country. Meanwhile, going shopping with a lack of purpose will lead them nowhere.
In conclusion, the reason behind the trend to spend spare time shopping is that the younger generation is massively affected by the policy of the major companies of selling as many products as possible. From my point of view, parents and society should make an effort to tackle this since it is not a good habit to spend free time lounging around malls.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, may, so, thus, while, as to, even so, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01162790698 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78164106988 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558139534884 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6515303382 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.933333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305025688886 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972375622761 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597043518332 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164080119257 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416326210249 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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