Smart devices have put all of the world’s information at our fingertips. The benefits of this development are obvious, but what are the drawbacks?
Nowadays, intelligent equipment has altered our lives significantly more convenient regarding to gathering information in an appropriate manner and its advantages should not be underestimated at any point. Despite this, many deficiencies would be obvious to every human being, such as severe health issues and being isolated from the world. These dreadful factors will be discussed in this essay.
Firstly, the excessive use of this equipment might lead to undesirable health problems. For example, in China, mobile phones are prohibited in many elementary schools and offenders would be punished accordingly. Moreover, extreme use of these devices would force the individual to remain inactive for long hours and that could cause obesity and some severe damage to eyesight. Thus, smart devices would be highly beneficial for our daily routine, but their amount of consumption should be supervised wisely to preventing mentioned health problems.
Secondly, smart devices would transform the world into a meaningless form for person which could eventually cause loneliness and depression at the end. Statistics shown that young adults in Japan are in great depression which most of them have no activities and are considerably isolated from their surroundings. In addition, unsupervised use of technological devices could have inevitable impacts on behavioral aspects of a human and causes the vast majority of some bad-tempered attitudes which would be estimated extremely high in such cases. As most scientists would agree expecting individuals to use highly intelligent devices properly and having some regular exercises and social activities throughout the day would be a preventative approach to depression at early ages.
To conclude, depression and hazardous health issues would be a result of using these modern devices and to cope with this, it is highly recommended by professionals to have physical activities at a routine basis.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62925170068 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01650825322 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602040816327 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9865680044 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.916666667 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158156613029 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632378305791 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356055728553 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104851412744 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209475255273 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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