Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have a risk. Do you think that advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
It is often argued that internet community or public networks enhance its popularity across the whole humane race. Nevertheless, providing private data on the Facebook or other popular social platforms brings some risk. This essay will argue that the disadvantages of social media outweigh the benefits. This essay will first provide the evidence of high possibility of personal data excessive usage and safety risk for less protected, vulnerable age group like kids and seniors, followed by an analysis of positive influence from new way of communication.
The main drawback of sharing personal details in the Internet is advertising spam, fulfillment of the registration form in social network allows advertising companies to set targeting tools directly to this person, promoting some goods or services. That is to say that social network profile become an object for marketing or for social research, despite the initial aim of join such community for making new friend or social links. Current social targeting vehicles are the huge business which take roots particularly from the social networks. Moreover, defenseless age groups like young children or elderly people could face up with frauds, for example when they start to communicate with new friend from social platform and he or she asking victims to send money in order to save the cat.
Those opposed to this essay that social media brings significant pleasant effect on different spheres of peoples lives. First of all such novelty allows people to keep links for ages, simply scrolling the Facebook feed and monitor the posts with photos, they could stay in touch. However, such demonstration of personal information may attract attention of advertisers or even villains.
In conclusion, the fact that vulnerability of private data within the social media is an obvious drawback it could limit the attractiveness of its usage.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, for example, in conclusion, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34113712375 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74024707619 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3120280101 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.083333333 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295516911942 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111698008313 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070729559211 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168194098965 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363884900163 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, for example, in conclusion, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34113712375 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74024707619 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3120280101 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.083333333 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295516911942 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111698008313 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070729559211 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168194098965 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363884900163 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.