In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education.
What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Practise makes a man perfect. Particular age group of children in 11 or 13 shows interest to go to schools to enhance high practical skills to ease finding a job. While others remain in school to continue learning generic academic knowledge. Educational institutions should change the pattern of their syllabus preparing pupils for the bigger opportunities. Consequently, it will help students to be well equipped according to the demand in job opportunity in this competitive world.
Undoubtedly, the world runs fast. Therefore, opportunities also flies quickly. That is, myriad opportunities seen in the past is very less nowadays. It is because of enormous practical knowledge children gained at the young age of 11 or 13 going to schools knocked their door with more opportunities than to the people who has gained common academic education, especially in some part of Europe. For example, every company offers jobs opportunity to an experience person than freshmen, therefore some schools it offers practical training programme on how to assemble mobile phones. As a result, showing their practical course certification, there are able to secure a job in mobile phone assembling company. Well, what happened to other age group of children? They have stayed in schools to learn general academic education it will not let them to stick to one opportunity instead knowing more in common on various field of work. In order to balance the job opportunity and knowledge amongst the children schools should offer more practical knowledge the same as theoretical knowledge according to the market demand.
In a summary, schools should consider to revise the syllabus according to the market demand it benefit every age group children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...practical skills to ease finding a job. While others remain in school to continue lea...
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Line 3, column 798, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to general'
Suggestion: to general
...n? They have stayed in schools to learn general academic education it will not let them...
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Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider revising'.
Suggestion: consider revising
...demand. In a summary, schools should consider to revise the syllabus according to the market de...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'benefits'?
Suggestion: benefits
...labus according to the market demand it benefit every age group children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32727272727 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92744211819 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603636363636 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8661637911 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422488829581 0.244688304435 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117384316583 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963549383106 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269340043341 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774188137651 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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