Some parents believe that children in their leisure should be involved in educational activities. While others believe it adds to much pressure on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
These days due to the spread of many activities, people got confused which leisure their children should be involved in, since some are educational activities and other are for fun and might put their kid’s life into a risk. So, some people believe that child should be interest more in educational activities, while another part of people are against and think that it adds too much load on children.
A number of parents prefer their children to concentrate on educational activities, because they think it will help them in their future life and during their studies. First, such activities will assist the one to store and know more information, where their brain will stay active and concentrate on important things that will make their life better. Second, educational activities for young ages is preferable, where it keep them away from violence, assist them on how to be sneaky in public. And act smart to avoid any difficulties in handling issues. For example, in my family, they prefer our nephew to do educational activities, and for them this will help him to learn and talk and early age. In my opinion, I don’t’ think that educational activities are the main leisure to educate the person about life and teach him quickly.
On the other hand, several people believe that leisure should be something that release stress and keep the children a little bit away from education pressure. First, parents think that their kid is under pressure most of the time, because of learning more than 8 hours a day between home tasks and school, therefore they must do some activities like soccer or play video games, to reduce they study load and stress. Second, children should be more involved in society, to understand the life from different angles. For example, in schools these days, many leisure subjects related to life matters are taught for students, to help them how to act in a good way. From my point of view, I believe that educational activities aren’t the only leisure that will change the person and teach him how to be.
In conclusion, leisure’s for some people should be educational, others think the opposite since it adds to much pressure on children. In my opinion, educational activities playa role in life, but in many cases is a bog load on the lid’s and may keep them away from society and they might prefer to stay alone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
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Message: Did you mean 'keeps'?
Suggestion: keeps
... for young ages is preferable, where it keep them away from violence, assist them on...
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... release stress and keep the children a little bit away from education pressure. First, pa...
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...others think the opposite since it adds to much pressure on children. In my opinio...
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Line 13, column 167, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
...on children. In my opinion, educational activities playa role in life, but in many cases i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in many cases, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93564356436 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61731296826 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470297029703 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.4824019692 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.933333333 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9333333333 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340064837539 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130507577269 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104143462738 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24808623245 0.151304729494 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878974255527 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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