some parents think children should have a mobile phone others disagree Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Essay topics:

some parents think children should have a mobile phone, others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Although some guardians believed that it is good if kids own cell phones, however, others think that it is of no use. I completely agreed with the notion that smartphone are not better for juvenile as it affects their education and health.

On the one hand, many children are provided with a mobile phone in order to keep in touch with their parents when they are out home. They can be in contact at any time or in any place. In other words, since these days in most of families both the parents are working, giving a cell phone to children aid them not only keep an update about their adolescents; but also, keep them informed during an emergency. For instance, the majority of working couples believed that certain application in smartphone assist them to keep a track on their children’s routine activities and traveling routes.

On the other hand, the most valid reason for dismissing the use of mobile phone by children is that they end up wasting their precious time. To be precise, cell phone these days are equipped with vivid application such as WhatsApp and Facebook, thereby, using it for socializing and playing games, which divert their attention from studies. Furthermore, Digital phones can be a major distraction. Youngsters spend most of the time surfing on the internet instead of doing outdoor physical activities. Consequently, excessive usage of mobile phones leads to health issues such as depression and sleep disorders.

In conclusion, smartphones are indeed useful in contacting families and friends, however, I opine that mobile phone brings more harm to youngsters in the form of addiction and deteriorating health conditions owing to excessive usage.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the families') or simply say ''most families''.
Suggestion: most of the families; most families
...ce. In other words, since these days in most of families both the parents are working, giving a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1421.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11151079137 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74477403136 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589928057554 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3606402994 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.416666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183198736503 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634467841168 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529423388461 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100238328015 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357865792278 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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