Some people believe that celebrating personal events is a waste of money. Others feel that these celebrations play an important role in the lives of individuals and in society as a whole. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In this day and age, most people in the world want to organize special events in their lives. While some people think that it plays a vital role in their lives, I side with those who suppose that this activity will lead to money wastage.
On the one hand, there are various reasons why celebrating these events play a vital role for each individual. First, due to this anniversary, we are able to save most moments until death, which will never happen second . Take weddings for example. It is the time that both bride and broom
just only do some activities one time together, such as hand in hand to the altar, exchange rings, etc. Secondly, it is an occasion when some people can create a relationship with someone they know. They also use this to tight bond the family, which is the most crucial factor for most of them.
However, celebrating these events can lead to financial issues for several reasons. The main reason is that some poorer families always have a monthly wage, which means that they feel these occasions are unessential. Instead of organizing it, if they want to get enough money, they will hold them via family, which is more necessary. On the other hand, they will spend an amount of money to prepare something for the event, such as decorating, meal, drink, and destination. As a result, those who celebrate it will face not only financial burdens but also the conflict between every member of the family.
To conclude, although some individuals believe that holding the anniversary is faced with fiscal problems, others think that it is essential to save the moment for everyone. However, I believe that we don’t need to organize this event in order to waste the budget.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78378378378 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36380902417 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584459459459 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5914010161 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209714072718 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069948546138 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505810588466 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114183583917 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309774190197 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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