Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work.How do you think children should spend their free time?

Essay topics:

Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work.
How do you think children should spend their free time?

In this modern era, education makes a major influence on the society. While some people argue that, the free time of children should be used for more school work, on my point of view, I strongly disagree with that argument. In this essay, I shall discuss on the ways in which the free times could be used by improving skills and kowledge of them.

First and foremost, parents can allow children engage in sporting activities since it helps for physical development of their children. For instance, those who engage in sports will have a good mental concentration together with efficiency and effectiveness at work. Children also need to relax during their student life, therefore free time can be used for relaxation in theme parks or playgrounds or sports complex.

Secondly, free time even can be used for aesthetic activities such as dancing, music, art etc. For example, parents can direct their children on theses activities and schools can promote them with necessary resources. Besides that, entertainment business is becoming an emerging business in current market place. Therfore, parents should not restrict their children singing, dancing and handwork skills since hat may help them to find out their livelihood. Similarly, children can use their free time on gardening, which would give them fresh crops together with higher self satisfaction and some income for them as well.

In conclusion, free time can be also used for studying in difficult subjects or subject areas. Students can use this time for further references and research as well. It is believed that parents should not pressurize their children only on studies, because knowledge alone cannot build a balanced man. Finally, it is recommended the government to facilitate and make awareness on the importance of extra curricular activities to their personal development.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: help them find
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27702702703 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7015876078 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.5667981959 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.133333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.73333333333 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347761676725 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125701728568 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899653409348 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24430597897 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071358189594 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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