Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In this modern world, there is an ongoing deliberaion among people on the whether children be encouraged on competition or cooperation. While some people argue that children who taught to cooperate become useful adults than children who was trained on competition, on my point of view I strongly agree with this argument. In this essay, I shall discuss factors in strengthening my argument while analyzing both sides of it.
First and foremost, there are myriad of advantages in training children on cooperation such as increase intergrity, minimize conflicts, and improve efficiency together with effectiveness. For instance, if a child is grown up with the environment of cooperation he will learn how to respect other people and he will get the fullest support from their tea members. In addition, these type of people become popular in the society and they can rise up as leaders as well. Moreover, cooperation is a major elemet requiired in teamwork, so these kind of people easily can achieve targets with the support of their team members.
On the other hand, if a child is raised for competition he would lose the sense of other people and environment as well. For example, those who poses high academic records seems to be isolated in their social life due to their self-centred nature. However, competition will benchmark child’s abilities and it will help them to improve their skills according to the desired level. Competition sometimes help children to tolerate in front of failures and make them ready to accept both win and lose situations.
In conclusion, children should be grown up with a qualities such as cooperation to make him a balanced successful person in the society, since everyone has to be a part of the society. It is believed, that government should revise the national curriculum in order to train the studentfor cooperation rathere than competition in both academic and extra curricular activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17405063291 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92208239692 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560126582278 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2480058535 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.769230769 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3076923077 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313920069758 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102056559917 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698289796121 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180491010137 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644479121124 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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