Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words
Educational methods, different systems are introduced globally, should be taken the highest consideration by parents and society. Some people advocate that encouraging children for competing their peers is a must for personality development; while, the opponents reject this notion, believing that children should be learnt to cooperate with each other to be more useful. I am supportive of the opinion that the cooperation leads to a balanced positive person not only for himself, but also for his community. This essay will discuss, firstly, the effect of encouraging children to the sense competition, and secondly, if the cooperation sense is introduced, would it be better? Followed by a reasoned conclusion.
One of the methods of education is to push children towards competing other pupils at school, and it is supported by many people. By putting children in such competitive environment between others, it boosts their ability and personality to succeed in their studies. It is also increasing their sense of responsibility while introducing into the work market. For example, Western markets where in United States of America are very competitive to be sustained by normal people. However, only strong businessmen who learnt from their early ages the meaning of fair competition are successful and being a leaders for several people.
On contrary, Cooperation sense between children is preferred to be encouraged by other people who believe that it produced very special productive adults. That level of productivity cannot be reached without learning the cooperation during the childhood; therefore, Eastern countries prefer to implement such educational system in their schools. For instance, a survey has been undertaken by a prestigious university in London reported that 90% of scientists all over the world are taught the sense of cooperation while their elementary schools. As result of that most of recent inventions are usually invented by groups of scientists who cooperate each other in their experiment.
To sum up, although the competition sense is mandatory to be implemented on children to boosts their abilities and skills, we can not deny that cooperation is a must for some cases for fruitful future and country development. I would suggest that a mixed method between both systems can be the optimum educational path for children if it is applied and controlled by educational experts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43766578249 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02269044785 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543766578249 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5752878916 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.125 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5625 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313850858421 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104595028922 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073571347856 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199600109046 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053447301611 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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