Some people believe that the government should take care of old people and provide financial support after they retire.Others say individuals should save during their working years to fund their own retirement.What is your opinion?Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.
There are different opinions on how to meet the human needs at retirement.Some people say the government should support retirees, while others believe people should put aside some savings for their retirement while working.I will explain my point of view along with the experiences in the following paragraphs.
In the first place, we should note that people in the community must learn how to save money to play an important role in the development of their society.In addition, they can save money on their retirement days because they have various problems such as illness and disability at retirement.If people save and save for their retirement, the burden will be lifted from the government and the government can raise the budgets of the social, industrial and service sectors.And retirees are not only dependent on the government at the time of their retirement, but also increase their value and use the savings they have made for their own well-being.Like regular trips to different places and having the right food and clothing as well as a great accommodation.
On the other hand, retirees are on the rise in every country, and the government cannot fully meet their needs such as insurance and housing.And its symptoms have also appeared in most countries with increasing retirement age.Increasing retirement age causes many problems in the community, including increased illness in the elderly and reduced youth employment.As a result, the country's ability to increase productive resources is diminished and the country suffers a great deal of economic and industrial damage.In this case, the economic problem of the country will not be solved by increasing the retirement age.
In conclusion,I believe that the government has a duty to support retirees, but it would be better to save people time by saving money for themselves and And this is in favor of personal and national development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2671009772 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96376487199 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530944625407 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 76.0 20.2975951904 374% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 221.811293671 49.4020404114 449% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 404.25 106.682146367 379% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 76.75 20.7667163134 370% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 34.5 7.06120827912 489% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288234011966 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183396532814 0.084324248473 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102943542917 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183396532814 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102943542917 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 41.8 13.0946893788 319% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -5.66 50.2224549098 -11% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.9 11.3001002004 291% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.47 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.8 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 32.4 10.1190380762 320% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 33.0 10.7795591182 306% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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