Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age of 60, it could cause problems. Do you agree and disagree?
It is commonly believed that there could be concerns if the elderly people is permitted to continue to job after attaining retirement age. In my opinion, I am partially agreed with this notion that a person should be allowed to work after the age of 60.
On the one side, delaying retirement enable individuals to contribute actively to the society. On a personal level, working past retirement age provides an avenue for individuals to remain not only physically but mentally active. Moreover, this option empowers the aging population to be financially independent and economically self-sustained past retirement age. In countries such as India, for instance, citizens are given an option to work beyond their existing retirement age based on the demand for their job and their capabilities to handle these tasks. Hence working beyond past retirement age empowers workers, ensure economic growth of the nation and alleviate the challenges faced by aging people.
On the other hand, working beyond retirement age may result in adverse health impacts on workers and a decrease in productivity levels. In Japan, the suicide rates have gradually increase due to rising stress level at work faced by the older people who are pushed beyond their optimal work capacity. Besides this, increasing stress levels from work lead to various health complications putting a strain on the healthcare system. Hence, working beyond retirement age worsen the overall welfare of personals and adversely impact the economy.
To conclude, though working beyond advancing years may impose health hazards leading to reduction in productivity, it seems to me that the benefits outweigh the demerits. In my opinion, the firms and organizations should actively involve their workers to be productive beyond their retirement age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42756183746 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82186839308 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586572438163 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.6563543924 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.153846154 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202988932491 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812346136845 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684898011196 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145592864141 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108720992907 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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