Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion
People have different views about career prosperity which could be achieved by academic education at university. While a group of people argue that it is more beneficial for young individuals to go to work place just after finishing the school, I believe that studying at university would benefit students in various ways.
There are several reasons why I would argue that academic education have a great impact on the quality of individual's life. Firstly, academic educations can open doors to better job opportunities and consequently they would enjoy better salary and higher quality of life. Secondly, students would learn descepline and interpersonal skills such as delegating a task or working in group by training. As a result they are more confident and self-sufficient which are determined keys to job satisfaction and they would be active members in business market. To prove my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, indicates that fellows with academic education were 27% more successful in work place than individuals without higher education.
On the other hand, the importance of vocational training should not be neglected. People who start working just after finishing the school career are qualified in a shorter period of time than those who continue their education at universities. Furthermore, after a few years they can be experienced enough to run their own business while they are young and it brings them great advantages. In addition, they have the ability to analyze the market statistics in a better way since they were part of the business environment. One particularly salient example for this is the owner of Microsoft company whose name is Bill Gates, he dropped out of the university of Howard when he was 19 years old. Although he did not finish his academic education, he is a prominent person in computer industry and he is one of the most successful managers of the world.
In conclusion, although university is a chance for students to broaden their horizons and pursuing their goals, the vocational training and skill are the features that play an important role in individuals' prosperity. Education system will be more successful if they can cover these two aspects at the same time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...chool career are qualified in a shorter period of time than those who continue their education...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15447154472 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87215826796 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7288588085 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.8 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149735386428 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050139381469 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538344047839 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105400217894 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780520548795 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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