Some people believe that subjects such as art, music, drama and creative writing have a bright future. Therefore, schools should spend more time teaching these subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Essay topics:

Some people believe that subjects such as art, music, drama and creative writing have a bright future. Therefore, schools should spend more time teaching these subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

To have additional skills rather than academic subjects will provide them one step ahead of others. So, in my viewpoint adding these subjects into curriculum will surely enhance the ability of the particular student. However, I still think that the academic subject has its own importance too. Here, in below essay I will try to enunciate both facts with my own perception.

Some proportion of folk accord that to have such subjects in study will definitely raise the talent of a student or maybe someone's hidden talent will come in front of the world. There are multifarious reasons for the inclusion of these themes. Firstly, for instance a student can take some break from the heavy load of the academic subjects. As, schools have 8 hours of educational teaching one can simple feel bored and also will lack in some other areas such as, will not take much interest in his personal life. So, by adding this subjects will grow children’s mind as well as will enhance the interest in academics.

But, some of the people have different opinions. They simply believe that by including such subject’s art, music, drama will degrade their performance in the subject which is important for them. While, some parents do not want their children to be part of these kind of activities; because they think it will stress their mind and also divert their focus from the original subjects.

Finally, I want to conclude that to have such subjects in academic curriculum will improve the children’s strength. But, the main subjects have its own importance on its place. Both must be treated equally, by this way a school can produce students with great zenith, which can become handy while they put their feet in this competitive world.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 6, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ance the interest in academics. But, some of the people have different opinions. They si...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...o not want their children to be part of these kind of activities; because they think it wi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'while', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as well as', 'in my view']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220238095238 0.247107183377 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.130952380952 0.155533422707 84% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0892857142857 0.0946595960268 94% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0625 0.0501214627716 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0595238095238 0.0437548338989 136% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.130952380952 0.122226691241 107% => OK
Participles: 0.014880952381 0.0403226058552 37% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.57604355929 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0178571428571 0.0326793684256 55% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0922619047619 0.0861772015684 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0505952380952 0.021408717616 236% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00595238095238 0.011925033212 50% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1748.0 1933.35771543 90% => OK
No of words: 293.0 316.048096192 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.96587030717 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.320819112628 0.374742101984 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249146757679 0.28420135186 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.180887372014 0.203846283523 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0955631399317 0.137316102897 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57604355929 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.037074148 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57337883959 0.56093040696 102% => OK
Word variations: 60.8035329455 60.7387585426 100% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5333333333 20.7743622355 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.72135955 49.517814964 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.533333333 127.492653851 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5333333333 20.7743622355 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.13333333333 0.814263465372 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 44.4480091013 49.1944974215 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.44705882353 1.69124875643 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197066240205 0.332605444948 59% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0904869754112 0.102741220458 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.069001486466 0.0668466124924 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.501184458051 0.534860350844 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108381197867 0.148594505496 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806250047806 0.134430193775 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351700899234 0.0742795772207 47% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.32385547819 0.324371583561 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0526151284622 0.0638462369009 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137663581867 0.228012699653 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236695142198 0.058150111329 41% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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