Some people blame the government for the increase in childhood obesity while others think it is the parents’ fault. Discuss both sides and give your opinion
Obesity, the root cause for most of the ailments and malfunctions of the body. Who is responsible for the growing obesity in childhood? Is it parents, Government or innocent children? In my views, primary contributor to this cause are the former and to lesser extent the innocent children. Parent being the primary and first teachers of children and Government acting as parents for the entire nation need to take over bigger responsibility for spoiling health of their future wealth i.e. children.
Firstly, we start with the major culprit, the parents. Parents being first role model for their kids and having the narrow responsibility of looking after their own kids only puts them more responsible for getting obesity problem by their children. I do not prefer to put parents in the corner and put all blames on them. But parents have immediate access and visibility to their kids which provides them more understanding of wrong doing, unhealthy eating habits, lack of exercise and outdoor playing. Little responsible look by parents and more focus on spreading awareness in their children about healthy lifestyle and vitality of physical activeness can contribute a lot to making their children fit and healthy.
On the contrary, I have observed that for the sake of inviting investments in the country, government has granted permissions and licenses to various fast food outlets. In additions to permission, theses Mac Donald’s, Subways, Pizza Hut etc have been heavily spending on the advertisements to make their products more lucrative to children by adding Kids meal to their product range. Government at large is heavily responsible for not only make the stage for children to spoil their health but also for wastage of scare resources available to the country in the form of money and healthy human resource.
To conclude, sense of responsibility lies to both government and parents, but parents responsibility outweighs than the government.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, so, in addition, in my view, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27707006369 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87423690367 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570063694268 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7279877019 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.357142857 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145895534209 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610046147501 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455803939206 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100226534893 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023769980595 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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