Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.Do you agree or disagree?Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

Essay topics:

Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

The issue of the level income among celebrities has grown in importance over the past few decades. Some people are of the view that entertainers earn much more money than others. It seems that the opinion is true, and I will discuss why in this essay. Besides, this essay will provide evidence as to why teachers should get the extra revenue.
It is right that every famous person entitles to gain considerably money. Firstly, stars have made great efforts and have paid many costs due to reaching successful achievements. Moreover, their products in forms of movies and music not only do they get benefits from them in terms of finance but also broaden ordinary people's horizon. As well as, sports stars make proud for both themselves and their countries. Hence, it is reasonable that they have affluent lives.
It may correct to say that the amount of money allocated to teachers should be increased. Without a doubt, education is an integral part of success throughout life. Therefore, teachers should be motivated by paying increments and encouraged by subsidizing to foster those who competent enough. For example, one of the main reasons that the UK considered as a developed country is that they pay more attention to their teacher and pay the highest salary to them.

Overall, it can be said that governments should invest in their stars in all fields like films, music, and sport, and the salary of teachers should be raised because of their monumental roles in bringing up individuals.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 319, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ms of finance but also broaden ordinary peoples horizon. As well as, sports stars make ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97222222222 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58011893746 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65873015873 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 378.0 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4708687037 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166666983191 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498209259173 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522264841923 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914504649638 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190245633425 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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