individuals should not be allowed to carry guns. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

individuals should not be allowed to carry guns. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

The issue of whether or not people are entitled to have guns is debatable. Some individuals are of the view that guns must be banned from ordinary citizens. I completely agree with this opinion and this essay will discuss why this law is beneficial.

Firstly, there is no doubt that the crime rate will be increased in society if firearms are allowed. Accidental and intentional murders in such societies are more than others where the guns are not permitted. For instance, in the US the number of offenses associated with guns is on the rise in comparison with Iran. Moreover, children and those who do not have enough knowledge about weapon are exposed to dangers because it is more likely that they wound or kill themselves accidentally.
Secondly, for importing or producing a large number of guns should be allocated lots of expenditure. Therefore, it is reasonable that the government and authorities invest this finance in pressing matter like employment and welfare and just a limited sector of this should be devoted to military services like guns.
It is my firm conviction that the availability of guns is the main factor to provoke people to commit crimes. Psychological research shows that gun ownership has the potential to shoot and kill an innocent person when they are angry.
Overall, it can be said that although the military should carry guns, the law of prohibiting guns should be enforced in the societies for ordinary people because of security and maintaining financial resources.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The issue of whether or not people are entitled to have guns is deb...
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Line 4, column 38, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
.... Secondly, for importing or producing a large number of guns should be allocated lots of expend...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 7.48453608247 281% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1263.0 937.175257732 135% => OK
No of words: 250.0 206.0 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.052 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78495673216 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 290.88556701 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7610794113 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.25 76.5299724578 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 4.34317383033 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 1.49484536082 535% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157803752506 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500466450652 0.0766984524023 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589418270134 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884007375285 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069513223889 0.0580467560999 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 8.71597938144 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 41.2886597938 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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