Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In the present world, few people believe that artists like actors, musicians, sports stars are earning too much money. While other people struggle to earn a decent amount of money to make their both ends meet, film stars and sportspersons are minting money. However, I am also in the covenant of the topic and will present both the sides of the coin.
To embark upon, entertainment has become an integral part of everyone’s life. In our day-to-day mundane routine, it is only movies, sports, music etc. that rescue us from leading a monotonous life. it includes a lot of hard work and creativity to entertain the audience who is the main source of their income. it is months and years of effort that they present on the screen. Secondly, sportsmen put all their effort to achieve success by burning the midnight oil, as it is a popular saying that “Success doesn’t come easy”. Apart from this, usually careers of sportsmen, actresses or musicians last for a shorter span of time than that of teachers, doctors and engineers.
On the contrast, I also think that there are certain other professions that should also be paid a handsome amount of money but are not. To exemplify, teachers who devote their entire life in building a strong nation are not paid even up to the mark; army officials spend their entire life on the border and are well deserved for appreciation for what they do for civilians. In addition to this, professions like doctors, politicians and civil services that require a higher level of perception should also be awarded a good salary slab in order to attract a good and intelligent crowd.
In conclusion, all the above points fortify that people in entertainment industry deserve to be paid a good amount but on the other hand, other professions which include skills, responsibility should also be paid well to attract the required talent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, apart from, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92163009404 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73854191781 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1700540314 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.142857143 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7857142857 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220603704008 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063949901222 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640134855999 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135444522022 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056089483834 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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