Some people think that music is useful in uniting people with various age and culture background. I completely agree that music is beneficial in unifying people together, including those who come from different backgrounds.
Firstly, this is because just like other art forms, music can be appreciated by anyone. A lot of musical creations often have fans who come from different backgrounds. Even though someone does not live in the same era with when a musical creation was born, he can still understand the value of that musical creation and unable to perceive the meaning of the song. For the example, Queen, a classical-rock band, was formed in the 1970s, and produced a lot of great songs in that era. However, today I can still find a lot of young people who love listening to their songs because they admire Queen's unique musical style. Along with older people, they can admire Queen's songs and understand the originality of Queen's musical creations.
Secondly, music is usually written deeply and earnestly, used to convey artist' feelings or special messages. On this side, music can serve as something that unite people who understand the meaning of the musical creation. For instance, Michael Jackson, a famous musical artist wrote a song entitled "Heal the World", which was written to help protecting children's rights. As a result, many of the listeners successfully receive the message and were affected to help protecting the rights of children.
In conclusion, I completely agree that music is beneficial in uniting different people from different backgrounds because music can be appreciated by anyone, and music can convey message to unite a lot of people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to protect' or 'protect'.
Suggestion: to protect; protect
... World', which was written to help protecting childrens rights. As a result, many of ...
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Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to protect' or 'protect'.
Suggestion: to protect; protect
...e the message and were affected to help protecting the rights of children. In conclusi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, as for, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18248175182 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72908765737 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532846715328 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8266053328 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.230769231 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221479242493 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940869447016 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912834879869 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177961433035 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0985427532563 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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