Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many parents believe that doing group activities by their children in their leisure is more useful than permitting them to decide, how to spend their time themselves. Personally, I stand in the middle of these views, and in the next few paragraphs I am going to describe my point.
Promoting juveniles to select activities which are done in the groups, can certainly include several benefits to them and their characters. Firstly, they will better discover themselves. For example, by having different roles in the groups, they would understand their strong points and also weaknesses of themselves. Secondly, they will learn to create connections with others, who have vast variety of tastes, which would prepare them for adulthood, either in future private or social life. Finally, some of new generation are shy by instinct. By putting them in these types of communities, they might gradually be able to tackle with this serious problem.
On the other hand, some parents believe that, children should themselves manage their spare time. They might say, in this way the children would be more self-confident and would learn how to stand on their own feet, therefore they could be capable to make future decisions independently. In addition, they might be better prepared for likely hard situations that they may encounter in the future. Furthermore, there are some activities that need high concentrations, and hence, these children may do them easier than others.
In my opinion, the best performance and result will be made by combining these two points of view, so that both benefits of group and individual affairs can be gained; Because, I think a successful person should have the advantages which are mentioned recently.
In conclusion, children should allocate a part of their time to participate in some group practices, which are chosen by their parents, to make a social character; and also they should be allowed to pick up some individual affairs in the remaining free time, in order to have a constructive future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14803625378 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7725482263 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546827794562 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4003366994 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.6 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331159824335 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103969927241 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105422798051 0.0667982634062 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191761342766 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884531585055 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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