Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.
It is opined by some that children should be motivated for planned team activities in their leisure hours by their parents, whilst others believe young ones should seek what interest them and invest their time and energy in such acts. This essay will discuss both the views and will give an opinion that why it is better to be a part and engage in group.
Firstly, as most of the children have inquisitive minds, they will love to learn in a well-planned environment. All the activities, especially within the same age groups have an objective, such as hand-eye coordination or how quickly one can respond. This way, not only social skills of these youngsters can be honed but they can sub-consciously learn values like sharing and caring. Additionally, it carry more weightage as more families are becoming nuclear and people travel away from their loved ones. To cite an example, summer camps not only help to utilize the free time but also expose off springs to new dimensions of art, craft and sports.
On the contrary, sometimes societal pressure can mould a child’s interest, they can get inclined to learning that are visible in groups. Peers can influence individual decision making. So, it is also argued that youngsters should develop interest of his/her own and find a knack in what he/she loves. However, this may not be feasible every time as adolescents do not have much idea of their surroundings. As they lack experience, they can be lured to unhealthy activities. For instance, it is feared that budding young guns can get hooked to internet or gaming applications and can pose risk to their privacy.
To sum it up, in my viewpoint well planned learning environment in a peer group is beneficial for children, as they can be better placed in group learning. Though, personal interest can be a stimulus to keep them busy, constant supervision may still be required to keep them safe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, may, so, still, well, for instance, such as, in my view, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8950617284 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69690927098 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608024691358 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9402887654 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.733333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216531194627 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662364758999 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712679387695 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145271545919 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102389760857 0.056905535591 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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