Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In this modern era, there is an ongoing deliberation among people on whether children should allow to take part in group activities or will they encourage to occupy themselves on their own, during their free time. On my point of view, I think that parents should direct their children for more group activities.
First and foremost, children can gain myriad of benefits by group activities such as teamworking, respecting others views, tolerance, mitigating conflicts and cooperation as well. For example, children who play with their neighbours’ during their free time get to know how to behave with a group of people such as way of talking and sharing things with them. In addition, this trainig and skills will help them to climb cooperate ladder in their future life with less conflicts with their subordinates.
On the other hand, some people argue that children should occupy themselves on their own during their free time. For instance, if a child is left alone they will face difficulties in finding the best ways to spend their free time due to lack of guidance. Also, they will lose the opportunity of exchanging their views with other people who are in their age. These kind of people are more likely to be self-centered and would not know the meaning of synergetic affects and integration as well. However, considering these factors parents, can take their children to play ground during their leisure hours, in fact they can allow them to join with domestic work along with their siblings to get the feeling and exposure on group work.
In conclusion, it is recommended to, allow children to get-on with group activities since there is a possibility of making them addicted on activities like video games which is harmful for both physical and mental fitness of them. It is also believed, that schools can encourage and facilitate children on group activities through their curriculum. In nutshell, group activities would also minimize the conflicts among different ethnicities and religions by ensuring peace in our world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'occupying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: occupying
...group activities or will they encourage to occupy themselves on their own, during their f...
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Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun conflicts is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...perate ladder in their future life with less conflicts with their subordinates. O...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...with other people who are in their age. These kind of people are more likely to be self-ce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11011904762 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67340606452 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529761904762 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.2432467483 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.076923077 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433895714579 0.244688304435 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183146892949 0.084324248473 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125243934906 0.0667982634062 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300132194409 0.151304729494 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111417554626 0.056905535591 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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