As some people suggest parents that they should encourage their children devote in organised group activities in their free times, others oppose this view in that children learning how to occupy themselves on their own should be supported by their parents. Both of the two viewpoints are essential to boys and girls as my concern, I will discuss them as follows.
On one hand, we are socialized species as human beings, thus teamwork should be valued at any time. Nowadays, more and more fields in the society are coorperated by people in different areas.Children should be cultivated by this spirit of working togrther. In the future, they may work or study in a more complex and inter-connnected world. If they can not adapt this fusion trend, there would be more and more difficulties in front of them. At present, we can see that Indians no matter in studying or working, they can behave more socialized than other Asian people. From Indian CEO to Indian-raced British prime minister, thay are good examples of teamwork for all of us. Moreover, parents should encourage their children to take part in these group activities, in regard of avoiding them sufferring from autism, which is a highly-concerned psychological issue in the world.
On the other hand, self-dependence is also significant to children nowadays. For most of the children, without concerning lacking of food or money, this happy generation may not confront lots of difficulties compared with their parents. Thus, how to live on themselves should be encouraged by parents. The boys and girls would not live on their monther and father forever. It is beneficial to them that they can solve daily problems by themselves when they are young. In my opinion, this is not only a kind of living experience but also a treasure of life which encourage us to be self-dependent.
In all, I contend that both the group activities and self dependence are cruitial to children, because peope with independent skills and teamwork spirits are more competitive in the future when they grow up.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Children
...oorperated by people in different areas.Children should be cultivated by this spirit of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01754385965 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89680946534 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546783625731 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5360567749 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.25 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337760794364 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991761300027 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138635111619 0.0667982634062 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23138566495 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17709138722 0.056905535591 311% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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