Some people say that a person’s success depends on his/her upbringing by parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people say that a person’s success depends on his/her upbringing by parents. Do you agree or disagree?

There is a debate that people's success is determined by their childhood, as parenting plays a crucial role in youngsters' personal development. I completely agree with this notion and this essay will analyze the reason behind how good parenting matters on children's grown-up stage of life.

To begin with, in several cases, achievement in adulthood appears as a result of academic competency, which depends on primary education and, ultimately, on parents' concentration on motivating their son and daughter to acquire knowledge. In other words, parents continuously work to instill the habit of reading, writing, and problem-solving on their children, and such habits help young minds to perform better later in their professional life. For instance, a recent study by World Learning Organization has observed that 87% of the employees with a high success rate at work have marked their bringing up as the key to perform well in a competitive market.

Secondly, a good lifestyle acts as the key to success in any goal, and by ensuring healthy nutrition and regular physical activities for infants, parents can easily contribute to their children's future success. To elaborate, if someone consumes vegetables, nuts, fruits, and other highly energetic food from early their life, then they will naturally follow that diet later in life. The habit of spending time in sports and outdoor activities and being punctual will also be an added benefit for a winning lifestyle. Without parents' encouragement, while children are growing up, a healthy personality and positive behavior can not be achievable. As a result, undoubtedly, parents have an active role in any individual's future success. Mr. Okala, a successful Chinese businessman, wrote in his autobiography that his mother is the reason behind the success of he has accomplished since she was always careful about encouraging a healthy food habit.

To conclude, parents play a vital role in most of the individual's success and it is highly recommended that children stay out of any toxic and violent environment when they grow up.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, while, for instance, as a result, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36144578313 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9637375699 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614457831325 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.2032502635 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.333333333 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0969196942657 0.244688304435 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394121390664 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375420406132 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0593381198086 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309703878576 0.056905535591 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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