Some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.
Do you think this is positive or negative development?
We are living in an era that means of entertainment has changed compared to past decades. Although many people follow more recently emerged methods and lifestyles, many other still defend the older ways such as spending money on tickets to attend sporting and cultural events. While I admire the preference of the latter group, I think the contrariwise. In this essay, both sides of the argument, as well as my own opinion, is briefly discussed.
Supporters argue that the first and perhaps the most obvious benefit of the mentioned trend is the contribution of people to local facilities’ maintenance. When people buy tickets for sports matches or cultural events, the money can be allocated to improve the premises and venues that these types of events are being held. Furthermore, the money that is spent on tickets can be allocated to preserve local tradition, be it sporting heritage or cultural customs. Because this capital encourages people to continue their activities related to this trend.
On the contrary side, it cannot be denied that this development has some major drawbacks as well. First and foremost, it is government's responsibility to encourage youngsters or pay for the public facilities’ maintenance, not the public's. Secondly, buying tickets and then going to an event is inconvenient. With the development and ever-growing enhancement of technology, people are attracted to more comfortable means of entertainment. For example, one can watch a sports match or a cultural documentary on the internet at home which has a more comfortable and friendlier atmosphere. Last but not least, I think the tickets for the mentioned events are usually overpriced and scarcely affordable, especially if you consider the free coverage of the events on television and internet. Football ticket price is a good example. On average, they cost 50 pounds per ticket. One can watch the match at home with friends and spend the money on other ventures instead.
All in all, while many people believe that buying tickets and spending a lot of money on them is beneficial, I do not think this is necessarily true. Due to mentioned points, I strongly believe the negative side of this development outweighs the positive side.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...this essay, both sides of the argument, as well as my own opinion, is briefly discussed. ...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... sporting heritage or cultural customs. Because this capital encourages people to conti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, while, for example, i think, such as, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20994475138 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01899200892 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552486187845 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6769878237 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2631578947 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411263568448 0.244688304435 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095715460091 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699196290528 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230764944573 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526985950014 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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