Some people suggest that bringing up children by the whole family including uncles, aunts and grandparents is better, rather than only by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples
There is a controversial debate regarding whether parents should involve extended family in bringing up their children. As far as I am concerned, inclusion of the whole family is a great practice, which has several benefits for children as well as parents.
There are various advantages for children if other members of family, such as grandparents, aunts and uncles, are involved in their life. To begin with, with parents working long hours these days, children are obliged to spend their leisure time alone at home by doing passive activities, such as watching TV or surfing on the internet. However, if more family members are involved, children could enjoy their time by wider ranges of healthier activities, from playing outside with their cousin to listening to their grandparent's story, while getting emotional supports from their relatives. It is also worth mentioning that grandparents who brought up and dealt with several children in their life have more experience and could help younger parents with giving them insightful suggestions.
It would also be helpful for parents with having other relatives in supporting their children. Firstly, parents would have opportunities for activities for themselves. Many people complain about their personal life, which might lead to marital problems, after having a child since it includes overwhelming amounts of responsibilities. However, by having reliable people to take care of their children, parents could also enjoy adulthood activities without any damaging effects on their children. Secondly, it would be very cost-effective. Parents, who do not have any family nearby to help them with their child, have to spend a lot of money on after-school activities or hiring babysitters. These costs could be saved for more enjoyable activities, which involve the whole family and bring more joy.
In conclusion, I would totally agree with involving the whole family in bringing up their children because of its significant advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43870967742 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87096049292 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564516129032 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7053805873 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.428571429 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201142451976 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845399671664 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513610280711 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155897948939 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307585589489 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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