Some people suggest that bringing up children by the whole family including uncles aunts and grandparents is better rather than only by parents Do you agree or disagree with this statement Give your opinion and examples

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Some people suggest that bringing up children by the whole family including uncles, aunts and grandparents is better, rather than only by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples.

It is often said that raising children in the company of close relatives such as grandparents and uncles can be more favorable for them, compared to bringing up just by parents. In my opinion, I believe that the living of youngsters in a broader family can be beneficial, in as much as they will grow up receiving support from a bigger number of close adults and in familiar communication with other children.
The main reason why I think that it can be useful for young people to grow up in a wider family because a contribution to children’s future will be made by different close people, who have various skills, opportunities and means, that should lead to a better chance of youths to success. This is not to say that, even if the influence from the parents is detrimental for the child, in case of raising additionally by other close people the risk of the adverse environment by parents can be diminished. Numerous scholars have concluded that in those parts of the world where people live in big families the number of youngsters who do not receive support from an elder for applying to college is much less than in places where parents bring up their kids individually.
Another point to consider is that the child will rise in the company of other kids, for example, cousins. Being in such an environment reduces the child feeling alone and outcast in a school or home, as the youngster can always have potential friends among the cousins. Moreover, this can reflect on children’s aspiration to excel in various fields such as sports or education, as a close living with peers tends to rise an element of competition among youngsters.
In conclusion, it seems advisable to bring up the children in the wider company, as it appears advantageous for them in the range of aspects, like having more elder supervision and more intimate relations with the same age close relatives.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 155, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'elder' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: elder
...em in the range of aspects, like having more elder supervision and more intimate relations...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79510703364 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75714150003 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529051987768 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.2975951904 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.7678353208 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.222222222 106.682146367 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.3333333333 20.7667163134 175% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11111111111 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168679766026 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720839103226 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424420832308 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10302013223 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490203250895 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.1190380762 162% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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